Another way to present your character to the reader is
through his/her thoughts. Get inside your character's head and reveal what s/he
hides from the world. A character's thoughts can reveal his/her desire. It is
through The Ghost's thoughts that the reader learns of his new life plan in the
beginning of The Ghost in Exile:
The Ghost had long ago earned his place in the seven hells. Now, he must embrace the fact that he had one skill and one purpose—to kill
those who needed to die. For a brief time he’d tried to forget that, and
because he hesitated to kill a monster, the man had nearly destroyed his
homeland and his daughter. Some people’s deaths were a thing to be celebrated
rather than mourned, and because he was forever tainted, forever a killer, he
should be the one to kill them.
Just as Samantha's thoughts tell the reader of her far less
bloody desire when the reader is introduced to her in The Goddess's
Choice:
The Princess Samantha sat at her dressing table and
glowered at her reflection as her maids dressed her hair. She detested balls
and loathed the hundreds of suitors who flocked around her, spouting empty
flattery: “I have never seen a lovelier flower, Your Highness!” or “Your eyes
rival the brilliance of the stars, Your Highness!” If I hear that one
again, I’ll vomit. It wouldn’t be quite so bad if even one of them meant it. Sometimes
she wished . . . . She pushed the thought away. She was the heir to the throne.
She couldn’t expect romance.
People often do not tell anyone their deepest desires.
Still, less do they reveal their strongest fears. When Samantha discovers that
her ability to see auras means she is not the king’s true heir, she keeps those
fears to herself:
Hours
later, Samantha put down the last volume. She had no doubts. Although the books disagreed on some minor aspects of an aurora’s power, it was “universally
agreed upon” that she was a bastard. This was much, much worse than being mad. Her
mother was little better than a whore, and she wasn’t the heir. She was a
fraud, an imposter, some foundling foisted on the king without his knowledge. She
wanted to scream, tear the books to pieces, and dissolve into a flood of tears,
but she was too devastated even to move.
My poor father! This will kill
him! She didn’t know how many times Solar had told her of his long wait for
an heir. He’d insisted if he had died without one, competing claimants would
tear Korthlundia apart. My father worked
his entire life to prevent this, and I have failed him. Who knows how many
thousands will die because of me?
While thoughts give the reader a peek into the character’s
mind, for those thoughts to become reveal, they must eventually be translated
into action. After stewing about her bastardry for some time, Samantha takes
action:
She
certainly needed men loyal to her. She picked up a quill and dipped it in ink. On
a sheet of paper, she wrote the names of the four men whose auras she’d seen—Phelan, Brice, Bearach, and Conroy. She called
Darhour and handed him the paper. “Add these to my guard.”
These men, like Kailen and Darhour, would
loyally serve a bastard; she wished she knew if she were damning herself by
allowing them to do so.
While thoughts
can tell us much about a character, it is what they do that ultimately reveals
who they are.
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